远航
                                                                                高一（20）班 徐银友
                                                         乘一叶轻舟，执一根长篙。
                                                         驶向那宽阔无边的大海，
                                                         去开启我人生的又一新的篇章，
                                                         挂起洁白的风帆，
                                                         希望那饱满的风帆，顺流的优势，
                                                         能使我快点到达岸那边我梦想的天堂。

                                                         它是那么地洁白，不为世尘所染。
                                                         又是那么地遥远，
                                                         此时的我，连它的轮廓还没看到。
                                                         但我并不是一个懦夫，
                                                         无论他距离我还有多远，
                                                         我依会一往直前。

评：梦想的天堂/ 遥远/ 遥远/ 无法触摸的边际/ 依旧飘渺的梦/ 依旧执着的心/ 尘埃的迷惑/ 围不住前进的风帆/  小作者执着的心，对理想的坚定颇让人感动，文笔不错，但缺乏诗韵的节奏感，望会有所进步！                                      ——陈慧清